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Post by Vortex on Mon Dec 19, 2016 7:53 am

Personality and the Basics

Name: Vortex(Nickname, real name is kept secret)
Gender: Hermaphrodite, but goes by Male
Type: Western Dragon
Species: Apothicon Completely Ordinary Dragon
Age: 935(In this body anyways, sinc- nevermind.)
Date of Birth: January 1st
Personality: At first glance, Vortex appears as a level headed, social individual. He enjoys being part of conversation, but becomes uncomfortable upon the mention of his past or mask. He is very kind and caring to most. He has a very long attention span, as well as a lot of patience. If one were to look past his calm outer shell, they would see a truly lonely, tortured soul that just wants companionship. He has rarely ever felt affection or gratitude in his past life, so the smallest thing can make him feel overjoyed. He never reveals his true identity to anyone who is not extremely special within his heart.
Hobbies:
-Reading
-Exploring
-Stargazing
-Decimating entire realities
Likes:
-Conversation
-Cold temperatures
-Souls
-Hatchlings/Smol creatures
Dislikes:
-Sudden, unexpected loud noises
-Dry writing styles
-Fire, due to previous "experiences", but he will put up with it most of the time
-Unexpected surprises
-The term 'Keeper'
Fears:
-Captivity
-Eels (don't ask)
-Keepers (don't ask either)

Origin, Culture, and Family

Place of Origin: Unknown, or secret, nobody except him really knows
Tribe: Rogue, still
Position: N/A
Language: Universal, Xoyan, Vuarish, Aquatic(Understand only), Koroth(A language rarely spoken by anyone. Is both a written and spoken language.)
Home: Really anywhere he feels like sitting down. (Though he has well hidden little hideouts within the territories of each tribe. (Yes, even the Ki'sha))
Parents: Never had any to begin with
Siblings: None
Relatives: Unknown
Mate: Caramina
Offspring: Nope
History: Very little is known about Vortex's past, other than he hates talking about it. (Revealed through RP)

Physical Appearance and Accessories

Height: 64ft
Length: 128ft
Wingspan: 232ft
Scale/Fur/Feathers: Midnight black scales
Eyes: Lava-ish orange
Accessories: A black enchanted mask which keeps him in a draconic state. It covers the top half of his face and horns, stopping just above his mouth. He wears this almost all the time.                         
              
Armor: N/A
Horns/Spikes: Two grey horns protruding through the back of his skull.
Overall Appearance: Vortex appears to be a normal western dragon with black scales, however, alongside his tongue he has an inner mouth, similar of that of a sea snake/eel. He can use it to speak as well, allowing him to speak with two voices at once, or just in different tones. When he takes his mask off, Vortex can be seen as he really is: a mass of liquid. As a liquid, he is an inky black colour, with consistency similar to maple syrup. He has complete control over the fluid, to the point where it can be manipulated into a draconic form, or even used in combat. The liquid he amounts to is about 1200 gallons.

Abilities and Strengths

Abilities: Telpathy. Alright, this one is pretty straightforward. Vortex is capable of communication through telepathy. There are two type of this, one which is private and requires a link, and one that simply broadcasts it in a 65 ft range to whomever is near. The private link, which only linked individuals can hear, requires both ends of the link to accept it, and must be within a 60 ft range. They must stay in this range, lest the link be broken.
Dreamvisit. Vortex is able to visit others in their dreams. If the recipient is asleep, and dreaming, then Vortex has the ability to appear in their dreams, either vocally, physically, or both. In order to dreamvisit, he must be quite close to the sleeping recipient, within 15 metres to be exact. He can stay in their dream until they wake up, which can be sped up by him being there. He can only dreamvisit one recipient per night, and only every 4-5 posts. If one realizes that he is infiltrating their dream, they can very easily force him out.

Strengths:
-He is hardened both mentally and physically from his past.
-He is immune to fire damage of up to 1562 degrees farenheit, when he is in his draconic form.
-As a liquid, ther are very few barricades that can keep him out.
Weaknesses:
-He cannot feel, taste or speak when he is a liquid
-He has "minor" PTSD from past events.
-His liquid form is flammable.
-He can only stay as a liquid for about an hour. (5-6 posts)


Fighting Style: Vortex usually avoids combat, seeing it as a waste of time and energy. However, if the need arises, he isn't too shabby at melee combat, plus his liquid form can be rather useful for fighting.
Magic: 'Till death we part'. This ability allows Vortex to force open a TNPP (Temporal Non-Physical Portal) into the land of the dead. By forcing open this portal, he can pull the soul of one deceased individual into a partial state, allowing them to speak but not interact with the physical world. The soul is not visible, but their voice is there. He can force the portal only once per topic, without external assistance, and can only hold the deceased's soul for exactly eight minutes and forty-one seconds. The longer this person has been dead, harder it is for Vortex to find them and keep the link open. If the soul has been dead for more than 2000 years then there is no chance of him finding them.


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Post by Artemise on Mon Dec 19, 2016 11:39 pm

The only problem I see here is his ability, Time Bend, as it's very vague.

@Vortex wrote:Time bend. Vortex has the ability to bend time in a way, making it seem as if he can almost teleport. This, however, is not true. He actually speeds up his own clock, meaning he can move at about the speed of light. It would also seem as if speeding up his timeline would mean he would die of old age quicker, however, while he is in warp, his timeline is actually stopped entirely, resuming when he exits. He can stay like this for days on end, however, will be quite drained after just a day in warp.

Please elaborate on this. While he's "in warp", as you call it, can he touch anything, or affect them? Or is this ability for him to move around at a very fast speed, almost like teleporting? When he "exits", will he exit at the same place he went "into warp"? How often can he use this ability? Also, the speed of light is way too fast, in my opinion, so you'll have to change that.

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You need to add more details into your ability and appearance. It'd be good to elaborate more on the latter, but only if you want to. Bump when edited.


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Post by Vortex on Tue Dec 20, 2016 9:00 am

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Post by Artemise on Tue Dec 20, 2016 11:59 pm

How does the Apothicon move? Is leeching its victims' thoughts its only way of attacking? Can it be killed? If so, how? Also, 10km is way too large a range.

I didn't notice earlier, because I thought it was 10 feet. >.>

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Post by Artemise on Thu Dec 22, 2016 6:14 pm

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Post by Owner on Thu Dec 22, 2016 11:03 pm

Apothicon link

You state that it can come into the physical world, but for how many posts? What causes it to come into the real world? Does it have a post limit as to how long it can stay dormant in Vortext in between coming out to the physical world? I just want more detail on it's physical world placement, so if you have anything to add other than what I have suggested it would probably help you in the long run.

'and eventually killing them. '

Unless approved by the owner, you can't kill other characters. You may change this to weakens or exhausts them, but not killing.

' This can be prevented by not thinking about the Apothicon.'

What happens when you don't think about it? Does it back off or does someone still need to hit the soft spot? Does it fight when you try to hit the spot? Could a draoconformie even reach it or would it need someone else's help?

Telepathy

'It works in a way that if they do accept, Vortex can attempt to form a telepsychic bond, which doesn't always work.'

Is there anything that can cause it not to work? I doubt this will be a huge problem, but just because you say it might not always work doesn't mean you'd follow through in rp. To improve this, you could state he can only communicate for a few posts at a time when they're connected, or that it takes a lot of energy and focus for him to do this.

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Post by Oculus on Tue Dec 27, 2016 5:27 pm

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Post by Artemise on Thu Jan 12, 2017 1:48 am

What can one do to prevent Vortex from entering their dreams?

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Post by Sonus Decessus on Thu Jan 12, 2017 6:06 pm

1/2 Approved. Nice work with the edits

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-- Re-approved!! ^^


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Post by Scortia on Thu Apr 27, 2017 3:19 pm

The only thing I'd say is to change the dead can speak so it can have a time limit, like, the soul can only stay in the living world for a maximum of five minutes. Also, I'd change the time limit to once per topic.

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Post by Scortia on Fri Aug 04, 2017 3:01 pm

Re-Approved!

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[21:53:14 19/11/2016]@ Oculus : are you guys mixing up Hetalia with Hentai?
[21:53:26 19/11/2016] Skylar : (*cough blaze/ardent*)
[21:53:31 19/11/2016] Silhouette : (I think that was it Oculus)


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