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Post by Vortex on Mon Dec 19, 2016 7:53 am

Personality and the Basics

Name: Vortex(Nickname, real name is kept secret)
Gender: Male
Type: Western Dragon
Species: Kor-Maroth
Age: 745 (In this body anyways, sinc- nevermind.)
Date of Birth: January 1st
Personality: At first glance, Vortex appears as a level headed, social individual. He enjoys being part of conversation, but becomes uncomfortable upon the mention of his past or mask. He is very kind and caring to most. He has a very long attention span, as well as a lot of patience. If one were to look past his calm outer shell, they would see a truly lonely, tortured soul that just wants companionship. He has rarely ever felt affection or gratitude in his past life, so the smallest thing can make him feel overjoyed. He never reveals his true identity to anyone who is not extremely special within his heart.
Hobbies:
-Reading
-Exploring
-Stargazing
Likes:
-Conversation
-Cold temperatures
-Seafood
-Hatchlings/Smol creatures
Dislikes:
-Sudden, unexpected loud noises
-Others seeing his true form, especially healers
-Fire, due to previous "experiences", but he will put up with it most of the time
-Unexpected surprises
Fears:
-Captivity
-Eels (don't ask)

Origin, Culture, and Family

Place of Origin: Unknown, or secret, nobody except him really knows
Tribe: Rouge, but may be part of a tribe eventually
Position: N/A
Language: Universal, Xoyan(Broken), Aquatic(Understand only), Keeper(A language rarely spoken by anyone. Is both a written and spoken language.)
Home: In the Ectan Mountains, with the Vuari.
Parents: Deceased
Siblings: None
Relatives: Unknown
Mate: Soon...
Offspring: Nope
History: Very little is known about Vortex's past, other than he hates talking about it. (Revealed through RP)

Physical Appearance and Accessories

Height: 64ft
Length: 128ft
Wingspan: 232ft
Scale/Fur/Feathers: Midnight black scales
Eyes: Deep blue
Accessories: A black enchanted mask which masks his injurys and pain. It covers the top half of his face and horns, stopping just above his mouth. He wears this almost all the time. The mask only prevents the pain from previous injuries, and will not do anything against wounds from the present or future.                                 
              
Armor: N/A
Horns/Spikes: Two grey horns protruding through the back of his skull.
Overall Appearance: Vortex appears to be a normal western dragon with black scales, however, alongside his tongue he has an inner mouth, similar of that of a sea snake/eel. He can use it to speak as well, allowing him to speak with two voices at once, or just in different tones. When he takes his mask off, Vortex can be seen as he really is, covered in gashes and wounds, bone showing in some places, and even his beating heart  through a hole in his chest. One of his horns is half broken off. His face is the most deformed, all skin gone around his mouth, exposing his teeth and  his jawbone. His eyes become soulless black voids, with small white dots in the centers. His wings become tattered and ripped as well, and any tears he shed would become blood. When his true form is shown, he does not immediately begin bleeding from his wounds, but a simple slash to one of them would start it. His voice also gets much deeper in his true form.

Abilities and Strengths

Abilities: Memory sharing. Vortex has the ability to share and receive memories with others. In order to share memories, him and the other must first form a link. The link can only be formed by Vortex, and it is done by him placing his paws on the sides of the recipient's forehead. The link can only be created if the recipient accepts the link invitation. If they accept, then the recipient then has the temporary ability to share select memories with Vortex, and vice versa. However, if the recipient does not have strong telepathic ability, then Vortex will have to keep his paws on their head, lest the link be broken.
Dreamvisit. Vortex is able to visit others in their dreams. If the recipient is asleep, and dreaming, then Vortex has the ability to appear in their dreams, either vocally, physically, or both. In order to dreamvisit, he must be quite close to the sleeping recipient, within 15 metres to be exact. He can stay in their dream until they wake up, which can be sped up by him being there. He can only dreamvisit one recipient per night, and only every 4-5 posts. If one realizes that he is infiltrating their dream, they can very easily force him out.
'Till death we part'. This ability allows Vortex to force open a TNPP (Temporal Non-Physical Portal) into the land of the dead. By forcing open this portal, he can pull the soul of one deceased individual into a partial state, allowing them to speak but not interact with the physical world. The soul is not visible, but their voice is there. He can force the portal only once per topic, without external assistance, and can only hold the deceased's soul for exactly eight minutes and forty-one seconds. The longer this person has been dead, harder it is for Vortex to find them and keep the link open. If the soul has been dead for more than 2000 years then there is no chance of him finding them.
Strengths:
-He is hardened both mentally and physically from his past.
-He is immune to fire damage of up to 451 degrees farenheit.
Weaknesses:
-When in his true form(AKA when his mask is off), he is very weak physically, and can be taken down easily.
-He has "minor" PTSD from past events.
-His lack of ability to fight is self-explainitory
Fighting Style: Vortex tries to avoid conflict, as he is extremely untrained in combat of any kind and dislikes the very idea of it. He will most likely run, surrender, of accept his fate.
Magic: He has plenty of arcane energy within him, but does not know how to use it, yet.


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Post by Artemise on Mon Dec 19, 2016 11:39 pm

The only problem I see here is his ability, Time Bend, as it's very vague.

@Vortex wrote:Time bend. Vortex has the ability to bend time in a way, making it seem as if he can almost teleport. This, however, is not true. He actually speeds up his own clock, meaning he can move at about the speed of light. It would also seem as if speeding up his timeline would mean he would die of old age quicker, however, while he is in warp, his timeline is actually stopped entirely, resuming when he exits. He can stay like this for days on end, however, will be quite drained after just a day in warp.

Please elaborate on this. While he's "in warp", as you call it, can he touch anything, or affect them? Or is this ability for him to move around at a very fast speed, almost like teleporting? When he "exits", will he exit at the same place he went "into warp"? How often can he use this ability? Also, the speed of light is way too fast, in my opinion, so you'll have to change that.

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You need to add more details into your ability and appearance. It'd be good to elaborate more on the latter, but only if you want to. Bump when edited.


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Post by Vortex on Tue Dec 20, 2016 9:00 am

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Post by Artemise on Tue Dec 20, 2016 11:59 pm

How does the Apothicon move? Is leeching its victims' thoughts its only way of attacking? Can it be killed? If so, how? Also, 10km is way too large a range.

I didn't notice earlier, because I thought it was 10 feet. >.>

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1/2 Approved


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Post by Owner on Thu Dec 22, 2016 11:03 pm

Apothicon link

You state that it can come into the physical world, but for how many posts? What causes it to come into the real world? Does it have a post limit as to how long it can stay dormant in Vortext in between coming out to the physical world? I just want more detail on it's physical world placement, so if you have anything to add other than what I have suggested it would probably help you in the long run.

'and eventually killing them. '

Unless approved by the owner, you can't kill other characters. You may change this to weakens or exhausts them, but not killing.

' This can be prevented by not thinking about the Apothicon.'

What happens when you don't think about it? Does it back off or does someone still need to hit the soft spot? Does it fight when you try to hit the spot? Could a draoconformie even reach it or would it need someone else's help?

Telepathy

'It works in a way that if they do accept, Vortex can attempt to form a telepsychic bond, which doesn't always work.'

Is there anything that can cause it not to work? I doubt this will be a huge problem, but just because you say it might not always work doesn't mean you'd follow through in rp. To improve this, you could state he can only communicate for a few posts at a time when they're connected, or that it takes a lot of energy and focus for him to do this.

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Post by Oculus on Tue Dec 27, 2016 5:27 pm

~out for edits~
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Post by Vortex on Fri Dec 30, 2016 11:13 am

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Post by Artemise on Thu Jan 12, 2017 1:48 am

What can one do to prevent Vortex from entering their dreams?

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1/2 Approved. Nice work with the edits

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-- Re-approved!! ^^


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Post by Scortia on Thu Apr 27, 2017 3:19 pm

The only thing I'd say is to change the dead can speak so it can have a time limit, like, the soul can only stay in the living world for a maximum of five minutes. Also, I'd change the time limit to once per topic.

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