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Post by Guryon on Fri Dec 30, 2016 3:15 pm

Personality and the Basics


Name:Guryon
Gender: Male
Type: Lindwyrm
Species: Aquatic Hookfanged Bloodyscales
Age: 15
Date of Birth: March 10th
Personality:Guryon is a dragon who will choose his fights carefully and choose ones that he could not lose. He doesn't take risks without knowing the full consequences being bad or good. He is protective of his family and close friends and is loyal as long as it is sensible to him. He doesn't trust much of anybody. He is also big on physical activities that require full use of his body.
Hobbies: Exercise and hunting
Likes: Hunting, exercise, and food.
Dislikes: Uncontrollability, people who are cruel, and laziness.
Fears: Burning heat and poison


Origin, Culture, and Family


Place of Origin: Iceilo Sea
Tribe: Lakara
Position: Fry
Language: Aquatic
Home: Regima Ocean
Parents: Mother: Dead
Father: NPC Tuna
Siblings: No
Relatives:Unknown
Mate:No
Offspring: No
History:Eh not right now


Physical Appearance and Accessories


Height:10 feet high
Length: 25 feet long
Wingspan: No wings
Scale/Fur/Feathers: Navy blue scales with black jagged stripes.
Eyes: Eyes that seem to constantly shift from maroon to violet.
Accessories:Guryon wears a black scarf around his neck.
Armor:He wears a rock helmet with leather starps on his head.
Horns/Spikes:He has one grey spike protruding from the top of his head facing backwards.
Overall Appearance: He is stockier and more muscular than the average lindwyrm. He has eight claws on both his hands. The end of his tail ends completely flat. He has gills that are almost hidden by large frills. His fangs hook around exactly like fish hooks.


Abilities and Strengths


Abilities:
Red spots: When Guryon bites his saliva has a special toxin that puts a few red spots in the victims vision. The effect takes a 1 post to take hold and only lasts for four of my own posts
Strengths:His body is .7% stronger than the average lindwyrm.
Weaknesses:

  • He is bewildered by magic and as such is completely distracted by it and forgets about what he was doing.
  • He has low endurance so he can't take many hits.

Fighting Style:He prefers to stay close but father away so he can hit but can also avoid getting hit easier.
Magic: No magic.


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Post by Artemise on Fri Dec 30, 2016 6:48 pm

Hi there! I'm going to be the one grading your app today. Take note of the words in red - they're what you have to correct in your app.

Personality:

@Guryon wrote:Guryon is a dragon who will choose his fights carefully and choose ones that he could not lose. He doesn't take many risks. He is protective of his family and close friends and is loyal as long as it is sensible to him. He doesn't trust much of anybody. He is also big on physical things Yes, your personality meets the minimum requirement, but personally, I think your character would be more interesting to roleplay if you added in some more details about him. Of course, if you don't want to do it then don't. ^^;

Abilities:

@Guryon wrote:Red spots: When Guryon bites his saliva has a special toxin that puts a few red spots in the victims vision. The effect takes a few minutes to take hold and only lasts for thirty-five minutes. Is that all it does? Put red spots in the victim's vision? Just wanted to clarify. Also, I suggest changing minutes to posts, as we don't often measure time in rps, and you might end up being the one who decides how long 35 minutes will be, which could be unfair.

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Post by Guryon on Fri Dec 30, 2016 7:02 pm

Bump. and yes thats all my ability does.

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Post by Artemise on Fri Dec 30, 2016 7:20 pm

"He is bewildered by magic and such loses all thought when he sees it."

What do you mean by 'loses all thought'?
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Post by Guryon on Fri Dec 30, 2016 7:26 pm

Bump

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Post by Artemise on Fri Dec 30, 2016 8:31 pm

1/2 Approved~


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Post by Sonus Decessus on Mon Jan 02, 2017 9:24 am

Excellent!! Glad you fixed what Artemise pointed out.
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