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Luda's application

Post by Luda on Tue Jan 17, 2017 11:05 am

Personality and the Basics


Name: Luda
Gender: Female
Type: Drake
Species: Snowflake Turquoise Drake
Age: 396
Date of Birth: February 12th
Personality: Luda is a lively, curious, and adventurous young being. She is sweet, gentle, caring, and fun, but she can also be mischievous and feisty. She is extremely determined, protective of the ones she loves, and ready for anything. She is energetic, bursting with enthusiasm to make new friends and go on adventures. Although she is filled with life, Luda can be calm, collected, and thoughtful and is an old soul, although this side of her is not often seen.
Hobbies: Luda loves spending her time in the Ouatel forest, whether that means racing through the leaves or wandering through the trees, lost in thought. She also enjoys climbing trees and watching nature from the treetops.
Likes: Adventures, making friends, telling and listening to stories, singing, and exercising.
Dislikes: Lazy and/or ignorant draconiformes, the taste of mealworms, wide open spaces, unreasonable violence, and when draconiformes point out her mistakes or beat her at a game.
Fears: Getting lost in the forest eternally, and war.


Origin, Culture, and Family


Place of Origin: The Etcan Mountains.
Tribe: Rogue.
Position: None.
Language: The Universal Language.
Home: A mountain right by the forest.
Parents: Yula and Gargor.
Siblings: None.
Relatives: None.
Mate: None.
Offspring: None.
History: Luda was born in the Etcan Mountains Her mother Yula was a well-known dragon in Layria. She ended up being killed by rocks falling from a cliff when Luda was only 1 year old. Luda's father Gargor left the mountain one day to hunt for Luda, who was 5 years old at the time, and never returned to the mountain where the family of Drakes resided. Because she was left as an orphan at a young age, Luda was left to fend for herself at the mountain and learned about Layria on her own. She found much of her worth in the beauty of nature, especially the Ouatel forest.


Physical Appearance and Accessories


Height: 40 feet tall.
Length: 110 feet.
Wingspan: Luda is a Drake so does not have any wings.
Scale/Fur/Feathers: Luda's scales are icy white with a bluish tint on her chest, stomach, and tail.
Eyes: Amber.
Accessories: None.
Armor: None.
Horns/Spikes: Luda has radiant blue spikes along her tail.
Overall Appearance: Luda is covered in soft and flaky scales, but her body is hard and compact. Her claws are a glistening blue and she has a faded silver coloring around her eyes.


Abilities and Strengths


Abilities: Luda is capable of breathing out small puffs of 1700 degree fire within a 55 foot range
Strengths: Luda is swift, agile, intelligent, is muscular, and is determined when protecting someone.
Weaknesses: Luda is prone to accidentally offending others due to the fact that she has no filter while in conversation. She can be sensitive if mentally hurt by a companion, easily distracted, clumsy in battle, too trusting of others, and a loud talker.
Fighting Style: Luda isn't notably strong, but she is quick, clever, and alert during battle. She is a short ranged fighter, best using the power of her tail, the spikes on her tail, and her sturdy neck and head.
Magic: None.


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Re: Luda's application

Post by Oculus on Tue Jan 17, 2017 11:27 am

Hi Luda, welcome to the site!

App looks really good so far, with just a couple of technical changes.

For abilities, move the hunting down to strengths. Remove athletic body as you have that down in strengths already, and change strong body to sturdy scales or muscular or something, and move that down to strengths. For her Fire, I suggest upping the range to 50-60 feet considering your length, and please specify a temperature of the flames.

For strengths, I would remove likeable as that's more a personality thing and dependent on other dragons, and protective as that is a behavior (maybe make it she becomes more determined when protecting someone instead)

For weaknesses, I would remove snappy and unforgiving as these are more personality, and by no filter, is this a weakness as in she cannot keep secrets? If not, it should also be personality. For loud, is she just loud in talking, or loud as in not able to move stealthily?

After those changes, make sure your weaknesses are at least one greater than strengths, or just bump and ask for help and I'll do my best. Otherwise, everything looks good, just techinicality things to be sorted ^.^
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Re: Luda's application

Post by Luda on Tue Jan 17, 2017 11:37 am

Hi, I edited my application. Hope it looks good!

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Re: Luda's application

Post by Oculus on Tue Jan 17, 2017 12:10 pm

~1/2 Approved~
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Re: Luda's application

Post by Sonus Decessus on Tue Jan 17, 2017 6:59 pm

2/2 Approved.
Nice job with the changes!

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