Agatha's application (needs approval)

Name: Agatha Pounce Aldith
Gender: Female
Type: Amphiptere
Species: Unknown
Age: 10 years
Date of Birth: 9 of agust
Personality:  she is a big cry baby, too emotive. Even living lonely, she wants friends, and she will try hard to keep them, Agatha is not the type of dragon that give up easily in this case, she is not shy, definitively the instead. One thing bad in this dragoness, is the fact that she is way too fearful, especially for the unknown creatures, that's because she is too perceptive. When she notice that you are a friendly, she will probably starts to make jokes, if you are rude to her, she will try to be patient, after all, she don't care about what the others think about her, she can be stubborn, hardly her opinion will change.
Hobbies: Hunt, catch butterflies and swim.
Likes: Fish, birds, meet anothers Dragons, conversations, play.
Dislikes: Insects, sharp-toungued dragons, fights, fire.
Fears: insects, dragons that can kill her without hesitation, enemies, big creatures, dark caves, fire, living beings that she don't know and she have a fear to enter in a fight.


Place of Origin: Layrian
Tribe: Rogue
Position: N/A
Language: Universal, but some words she pronunce wrong.
Home: In Layrian, in a tiny destroyed house, with a big hole, but the house can shelter someone from the rain, near of a lake.
Parents: Mother was called ''Ethedreda'', father was called ''Phoenix'', they wanted to be good parents even stealing things from others, they are dead now.
Siblings: None.
Relatives: Hers parents are the only dragons that she know.
Mate: None.
Offspring: None.
History: When she was a hatchling, her mother and father was protecting her by two dragons who wanted to take it back something that Agatha's family stole, they killed Agatha's father Phoenix, Ethedreda, the mother survived, but she was permanently wounded (she became blind in one eye), so she taught Agatha the universal languague, but she couldn't taught her to fly, because hers wings served like flippers, her father it was a bad formation in the wings. Then, Ethedreda also taught her others things but Agatha learned how to hunt in the water by herself, some years later, Ethedreda died by a terminal disease, and now, Agatha is lonely.




Height: 20 inches
Length: 10 inches
Wingspan: 20 inches
Scale/Fur/Feathers: she has some colored feathers in her hole body, the colors are: dark blue in the most part of hers feathers, greenish blue in the tail tips. In her tail, two feathers are more large and sharped, remembering a tail of a wale, in her belly, she have a big light blue marking, in the head, some big feathers remembering a cockatiel.
Eyes: Agatha has dark green eyes.
Accessories: One necklace with a pendant in format of a heart.
Armor: none.
Horns/Spikes: none
Overall Appearance: Agatha is a tiny, skinny dragon, with sharp yellowish teeths,  her wings looks like flippers, because of that, she ''walk'' like a seal.



Abilities: Poison by her bite: this attack can paralise big creatures, and kill small creatures, no one taught her this ability, she just born with the poison in hers teeths, the symptoms are: joint pain if the animal will die, and the area that she bited will infect, if the animal will be paralised, the body will stop to move slowly, it takes 10 minutes to the creature paralise completely, and the creature will be paralised for 2 hours.
camouflage: this ability allow Agatha to became invisible for some creatures, it works like the camouflage of the chameleon, she born with this ability.
Strengths: Agatha is speedy in the water, with a big agility, she can kill small creatures (fishes, crabs etc) without so much difficulties than some animals in the lake that she lives, and she can escape from big creatures too.
Weaknesses: She can be easily killed because she is slow and clumsy out of water.
she always feel bad for the death of her mother so, if someone scold her mother, she will cry.
Fighting Style: Agatha don't fight, she just try to escape when she is out of the water or she will use the camouflage, and wait to the creature get out, in the water, Agatha will try to bite the enemy, and she will try to dodge from their attacks.
Magic: The only magic that she know is the healing breath, but this magic can only be used to cure minor wounds, in serious injuries, the magic will have a minor effect, changing almost anything, this breath have a grayish-white color and she learned from her mother, but she didn't developed too much, if she developed, the magic would cure more serious injuries, the healing breath requires too much energy, making Agatha tired eventually, if Agatha use this in you, you will have a sensation of a cold breeze in the place of your body that she used.

Personality:
This needs to be fice sentences long

Height:
Um, your sizes are reaaaaally small. You want to be this small at age ten?

Abilities:
Can you please specify and give details about the poison and camouflage?

Strengths:
Please explain how you can easily kill creates by being fast only, as being fast doesn't mean things are easy to kill

Magic:
Can you explain this ability of healing breath? How it heals, what it does/comes from (actually a breath or something else?)

Oculus wrote:Personality:
This needs to be fice sentences long

Height:
Um, your sizes are reaaaaally small.  You want to be this small at age ten?

Abilities:
Can you please specify and give details about the poison and camouflage?

Strengths:
Please explain how you can easily kill creates by being fast only, as being fast doesn't mean things are easy to kill

Magic:
Can you explain this ability of healing breath?  How it heals, what it does/comes from (actually a breath or something else?)

Yeah, i really want a small dragon, the remaining i will change.

Sonus Decessus wrote:

Agatha wrote:

Oculus wrote:Personality:
This needs to be fice sentences long

Height:
Um, your sizes are reaaaaally small.  You want to be this small at age ten?

Abilities:
Can you please specify and give details about the poison and camouflage?

Strengths:
Please explain how you can easily kill creates by being fast only, as being fast doesn't mean things are easy to kill

Magic:
Can you explain this ability of healing breath?  How it heals, what it does/comes from (actually a breath or something else?)

Yeah, i really want a small dragon, the remaining i will change.

Even though you will remain that small, you still need to answer and explain, if you will, the other things Oculus has pointed out. Thank you

Can you give me tips?

Bump

Hi agatha. For,your personality section, you need to make it five sentences long. You have one long run on sentence, some suggest breaking it up into smaller sentences.

Poison: since you are so small, what is considered small to you, and what is considered large to you? I suggest giving examples of heights for each.

Camouflage is just like a chameleon? If so, it works well while holding still, but while moving, it wouldn't be very good, right?

Oculus wrote:Hi agatha.  For,your personality section, you need to make it five sentences long.  You have one long run on sentence, some suggest breaking it up into smaller sentences.

Poison:  since you are so small, what is considered small to you, and what is considered large to you?  I suggest giving examples of heights for each.

Camouflage is just like a chameleon?  If so, it works well while holding still, but while moving, it wouldn't be very good, right?

Yup, you're right about the camouflage.

Sonus Decessus wrote:

Agatha wrote:

Personality and the Basics

Name: Agatha Pounce Aldith
Gender: Female
Type: Amphiptere
Species: Unknown
Age: 10 years
Date of Birth: 9 of agust August
Personality:  she is a emotive dragon, and she sometimes, is the first to notice things that the others don't noticed, she acts calm, and corteous, she is way too protective to who she likes, and fearful of anything, Agatha is vingative, pessimistic, sarcastic, and lazy, she sleeps too much, but trustworthy, comunicative, and she is playful, sometimes realistic, and direct when she says the truth, even being lazy, she work hard if necessary.
So your commas are your periods? Please correct this

I'm still changing this.

Okay. Bump when you're done.

Sonus Decessus wrote:Okay. Bump when you're done.

Bump?

You post
"bump"
And that lets us moderators know if you're done editing

Bump

Ahhh. Agatha you can fit one more sentence into your personality! You can do it!