killie the blue dragon (needs approvel(5/5)

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Personality and the Basics


Name: Killie.
Gender: Male
Type: western dragon
Species: fire Dragon
Age: 23
Date of Birth: 12/feb/1993
Personality:He is someone who is a bit shy of his past and doesn't really like to talk about it. He does not want to be laughed at or get himself killed. He is also really bad at keeping secrets. He is social enough, he sometimes freaks out if he needs to perform in front of others with tricks he doesn't know. After what happened to him in the past he is trying to fit in.
Hobbies: flying and fire traininge
Likes:  fooling others, and adventure, even if it's dangerous beinge around ohters
Dislikes: struggle bullies war traps
Fears: that ohter dragon will not accept him that he is a intruder beinge killed ghosts



Origin, Culture, and Family


Place of Origin: human villige or house in layrian (i hope it's not a problem)
Tribe: rogue
Position: n/a
Language:Common Language
Home: human villige Deepwald villige (even know he can never return there)
Parents: Leon and Kyrstin (used name ganerator)
Siblings: n/a
Relatives: no
Mate: no
Offspring: no
History: He was born like a human and also raised like one one day he wandered of on his own getting in a place he should never come he comes in a
laboratory where the are working on a secret project it was a drink he drink from it and chanced into a dragon he was just lucky do escape but his form would stay this was
Never do return do his village from that day he got lost he don't know any of his new abilities yet and is pretty scared continue in rp



Physical Appearance and Accessories


Height: 30.5 feet
Length: 60 feet
Wingspan: 40.7 feet
Scale/Fur/Feathers: a blue body with a red chest blade and wings
Eyes: red
Accessories: n/a
Armor: n/a
Horns/Spikes: horn on his head
Overall a big dragon who has a sharp tail he has four legs wings and a head with there on some horns



Abilities and Strengths


Abilities: Fire balls, Fire breath, and covering yourself with fire
Strengths: fire proof
Weaknesses: even know his dragon body gave him a good stragnth lots of his weaknesses remain intackt like bullets blades or somthing alse but if he goes into the water he can't use his fire abilities for a while
Fighting Style: mostly rushing in without thinking make a lot of use from fire abilities but only does it do crimanels tries do stay in renge most of the time but it will not Always work what leaves in claw do claw combat or arial fights
Magic: he i no magic weilder


with the help of neru thanks neru bechouse i had trouble writh santaces
i write it he set the santaces thanks neru hugs neru

I can't accept your app without you having made those changes. I'm not saying he is a Night Fury, I was using that as an example. I'm sorry you don't feel appreciated, but unless you make those changes, you can't RP. Everybody has to follow the same rules, we don't change them or make exceptions.

is fire dragon good then?

That's just fine.

how do i make it so he can be used for RP becouse i realy want do

who am i joking i will never get it rready

Again, make the chances I specified 2 posts above.

chance the things it does not feel it is mine anymore you just say make sentaces but i don't get anything do be showen of what to do only critizezam and no help thats what i get here

The only thing I've told you directly to put are things that you wrote yourself, but with correct spelling or grammar. I'm not forcing you to do anything. It's your own app, just make it so that it applies to the rules. Everybody else does it. All the changes I specified aren't even changes to your character, but simple changes to the app itself. Mostly giving us MORE information, which doesn't change your character unless you really just don't know him at all, in which case yes, you'd have to deepen his personality. I've been trying to help you, but if you refuse to change your app, there's absolutely nothing I, nor any other mod or admin, can do for you here.

i'm sry i try do get it right but nohting seens do apply do the rules i'm realy trying but i never get it rigt sry for beinge rude but it is pretty hard so it's only personallity i need do chance or is there also somthing alse?

Okay, so remember the post up there , where I took your post and wrote on it with red letters? All the red letters are things I want you to change. Most of it is very simple, just changing the spelling or grammar of something so that it's understandable. We want all English speakers to understand your app, so that everybody can have fun roleplaying with you. So try to start changing the things I specified there. It's okay if you don't understand what I mean on some parts, just ask me if it doesn't make sense. I'll help you.

[quote="killie"]Personality and the Basics


Name: Killie.
Gender: Male
Type: western dragon
Species: fire Dragon
Age: 23
Date of Birth: 12/feb/1993
Personality:He is someone who is a bit shy of his past and doesn't really like to talk about it. He does not want to be laughed at or get himself killed. He is also really bad at keeping secrets. He is social enough, he sometimes freaks out if he needs to perform in front of others with tricks he doesn't know. After what happened to him in the past he is trying to fit in.
Hobbies: flying and fire traininge
Likes:  fooling others, and adventure, even if it's dangerous beinge around ohters
Dislikes: struggle bullies war traps
Fears: that ohter dragon will not accept him that he is a intruder beinge killed ghosts



Origin, Culture, and Family


Place of Origin: human villige or house in layrian (i hope it's not a problem)
Tribe: rogue
Position: n/a
Language: English
Home: human villige Deepwald villige (even know he can never return there)
Parents: Leon and Kyrstin (used name ganerator)
Siblings: n/a
Relatives: no
Mate: no
Offspring: no
History: He was born like a human and also raised like one one day he wandered of on his own getting in a place he should never come he comes in a
laboratory where the are working on a secret project it was a drink he drink from it and chanced into a dragon he was just lucky do escape but his form would stay this was
Never do return do his village from that day he got lost he don't know any of his new abilities yet and is pretty scared continue in rp



Physical Appearance and Accessories


Height: 30.5 feet
Length: 60 feet
Wingspan: 40.7 feet
Scale/Fur/Feathers: a blue body with a red chest blade and wings
Eyes: red
Accessories: n/a
Armor: n/a
Horns/Spikes: horn on his head
Overall a big dragon who has a sharp tail he has four legs wings and a head with there on some horns



Abilities and Strengths


Abilities: lot's of fire abilities like breathing fire fireballs and fire manipulation he can control the fire itself and dicides what it does just as long that it is fire
Strengths: fire proof
Weaknesses: even know his dragon body gave him a good stragnth lots of his weaknesses remain intackt like bullets blades or somthing alse but if he goes into the water he can't use his fire abilities for a while
Fighting Style: mostly rushing in without thinking make a lot of use from fire abilities but only does it do crimanels tries do stay in renge most of the time but it will not Always work what leaves in claw do claw combat or arial fights
Magic: he i no magic weilder

explain abilities why am i so bad ad explaining stuff and sentaces?

Good job! It now follows all the rules! So, Approved!

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