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Veokia, the Umbran Flame

Post by Veokia on Mon Sep 10, 2018 10:32 pm

Personality and the Basics


Name: Veokia
Pronunciation:Ve-Oh-Kee-Yuh
Gender: Female
Type: Western
Species:
Age: 5 years
Date of Birth: Big Oof
Personality:
Hobbies: Being a tiny derg
Likes: Reading, other kids, fruities, etc.
Dislikes: Teh veggies, writing, teasing, medicine, etc
Fears: Scary dergs, obviously the fear of death, the dark, etc.


Origin, Culture, and Family


Place of Origin: Near the Faen River
Tribe: Rogue currently
Position: N/A
Language: she isn't really fuent in any of the languages.
Home: A smol house made of ferns and sticks.
Parents: Missing.
Siblings: Missing.
Relatives: None.
Mate: Waht
Offspring: ._.
History:


Physical Appearance and Accessories


Height: 8 feet
Length: 12 feet
Wingspan: 5 feet
Scale/Fur/Feathers: Furred
Eyes: blind in one eye, but the other is teal.
Accessories: A crimson red scarf that she holds very dearly to her heart. And a small smooth stone in a bracelet made of silver on her right wrist.
Armor: Three bracers on both of her shins and one on her left forearm made from obsidian with gold symbols of peace, love, and unity.
Horns/Spikes: Small slightly curved and elegant horns
Overall Appearance:


Abilities and Strengths


Abilities: Her fur can temporarily camouflage itself, she also has special eyes that can allow her to basically see someone's vitals and thinga like that.
Strengths: She doesn't have too much mental strength, but living on her own, she taught herself to push through some hard things for survival. And being a child, she isn't very strong, so her physical strength isn't really on par with others, but she can be decently fast, which can certainly give her an edge should she run into a situation.(Pun intended)
Weaknesses: She's a child, so many things come to mind, but to name a few... She's deathly allergic to sunflowers, and she can be manipulated rather easily, just to name a couple.
Fighting Style: Well, she would rather never have to fight, but if the situation were to arise and she had absolutely no choice, she would use her Umbra-pyrokinesis to keep her opponemts away from her. And if that fail, she can coat her claws in such a flame to give her physical strikes an extra boost of deadliness.
Magic: Umbra-pyrokinesis, she can create, shape and manipulate the fire of a darker, detrimental nature; that which damages, destroys, and consumes anything/everything they come across, representing the hazardous destructive side of fire, which in turn ignores most of the limitations and weaknesses of the normal fire. In essence, this is about solely controlling the negative powers of fire. Umbra-pyrokinesis is volatile/destructive, causing harm to oneself/environment by accident is ever-present danger
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Re: Veokia, the Umbran Flame

Post by Veokia on Tue Sep 11, 2018 11:29 am

Oof, I don't do things in lists too much
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Re: Veokia, the Umbran Flame

Post by Haven on Wed Sep 26, 2018 9:51 am

Abilities: Her fur can temporarily camouflage itself, she also has special eyes that can allow her to basically see someone's vitals and thinga like that.

How long can it camouflage? What if it's super sunny will they see her shadow? You need to expand on this.
"Special Eyes". How long can she see some's vitals? Heart rate? What exactly can she see? Can she see all animal's "health bars" or only dragons? Please expand on that.

Strengths: She doesn't have too much mental strength, but living on her own, she taught herself to push through some hard things for survival. And being a child, she isn't very strong, so her physical strength isn't really on par with others, but she can be decently fast, which can certainly give her an edge should she run into a situation.(Pun intended)

How fast can she run? Do you really only want one strength? If there are more you have to add them.

Weaknesses: She's a child, so many things come to mind, but to name a few... She's deathly allergic to sunflowers, and she can be manipulated rather easily, just to name a couple.

What will the sunflowers do to her?
Why can she be manipulated easily?
Expand on both please.
And you need to name the "couple".

Magic: Umbra-pyrokinesis, she can create, shape and manipulate the fire of a darker, detrimental nature; that which damages, destroys, and consumes anything/everything they come across, representing the hazardous destructive side of fire, which in turn ignores most of the limitations and weaknesses of the normal fire. In essence, this is about solely controlling the negative powers of fire. Umbra-pyrokinesis is volatile/destructive, causing harm to oneself/environment by accident is ever-present danger

How far can she do it? For how long? What's the temp?

Please PLEASE expand on nearly all of your Abilities and Strengths section!
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Re: Veokia, the Umbran Flame

Post by Veokia on Wed Sep 26, 2018 10:00 am

I have already explained that she wasn't done to begin with and that I was putting her out for the small things first. I made her when I was tired, and in doing so was a bit sloppy. Savan already covered this with me and I explained this same thing.
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Re: Veokia, the Umbran Flame

Post by Haven on Wed Sep 26, 2018 12:39 pm

Then Savan needs to comment so I don't. Why is it in app grading requests if you're not done?
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Re: Veokia, the Umbran Flame

Post by Veokia on Wed Sep 26, 2018 1:00 pm

To at the very least give a description of her and what she can do while I refine her.
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